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PostSubject: Kurogane Zakura.   Sun Feb 10, 2013 11:28 am

Name: Kurogane Zakura.

Nickname: Blade

Gender: Male

Age: 12

Trainer Type: Partially Trainer, but likes Caring and breeding pokemon too.

Phisical Appearence:

Personality: Kuro, alias Blade Zakura is smart and quick. Even though his history would make you guess he is scared and rude, he is actually smarter then a normall kid. even though he doesn't know what 2 + two means he could probally defeat the best student of a school in a battle of wits, but only if its about logic and inteligennce, not knowledge. Even though everybody thinks he is dirty and filfthy, he believes the sosiety hasn't beaten the jungle law, but created the civilisation law: The richest survives. It seems no matter how bad he is hit in a battle, it always looks like if he can hit back twice as hard. Blade loves his pokemon and the reason he wants too become the champion is too show that the rich are not superior to the poor.

History: Blade was born on the streets as a homeless kids. His family where ex millionairs who went failiet and had to live on the street. They died when Blade was 4, they gave him a pokemon, it was a Heracross, His fathers Heracross. Heracross also had a EM move. In his days on the streets, Blade became smart and light on his feet. He could jump high and some crazy in the village he lived in though he was some kind of spider man. which was just a result of him beig a great climber and jumper. Heracross and blade where almost unbeatable for the low level trainers they faught. Blade just started on his journey but he knows he will win agaist the champio oe day..

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Johto:
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Pokeballs: 5 Pokeballs
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Medicine: 1 Revive
Berries: 5 Oran Berries
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Pokemon: Heracross
Nickname: Cross
Gender: Male
Level: 12
Moves: Horn Attack, Tackle, Night Slash, Aerial Ace, EM: Focus Punch
Ability: Guts
Personality: Heracross is brave and will be a all out attacker while fighting.
Happiness: 45
Exp: 2

Pokemon: Bulbasaur
Nickname: Seed
Gender: Male
Level: 8
Moves: Tackle, Growl, Leech Seed
Ability: Overgrow
Personality: Energetic and competitive. He tends to overdo things, and may cause problems when he isn't careful.
Happiness: 20
Exp: 2


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PostSubject: Re: Kurogane Zakura.   Sun Feb 10, 2013 11:31 am

Personality has to be 7 sentences, I think yours is two, as one is just a long run on sentence. Add a bit more, or break your longer sentence into shorter ones ^^
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PostSubject: Re: Kurogane Zakura.   Sun Feb 10, 2013 11:35 am

Personally, I counted 6-7 short sentences and 1 long one.
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PostSubject: Re: Kurogane Zakura.   Sun Feb 10, 2013 12:49 pm

Kuro, alias Blade Zakura is smart and quick. Even though his history would make you guess he is scared and rude, he is actually smarter then a normall kid, even though he doesn't know what 2 + two means he could probally defeat the best student of a school in a battle of wits, but only if its about logic and inteligennce, not knowledge.

Color coded both your sentences to show that there are only two. I'll count your longer sentence as three, so you only need to add 3 sentences :3
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PostSubject: Re: Kurogane Zakura.   Sun Feb 10, 2013 2:28 pm

This should be good.
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PostSubject: Re: Kurogane Zakura.   Sun Feb 10, 2013 2:34 pm

Yup, there were a ton of spelling errors, so watch out for them next time.

I'll say that this is approved!
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